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Into The Ocean

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You’re perfection in a single glance
And everyone’s to busy taking pictures
To explore reality, but when the tide goes
Everyone will see the trash and dead things
And wonder where they came from.

You’re just like the ocean.

And now I’m drowning in your indifference
With waves relentlessly crashing
Over my head, pulling me under,
Tossing me around,
Dragging me down.

Well, I always was lost in you.

My mouth opens to tell you so
But, as your poison fills my throat,
I think my chest might explode
And I might welcome it
If only it puts out the fire
That’s blazing in my lungs.

Didn’t I tell you that you take my breath away?

No longer can I tell where you end and I begin,
Or if I even exist,
And I hear you laughing because
I always wished to be part of you,
So that you could never push me away
Without losing yourself.

Now I’m the one who has no self to find.
I've never wrote anything in this style really, but I love when others do so I thought I'd attempt it. I really like the first stanza, but I'm not sure about the rest. Feedback would REALLY be appreciated on this one!

Also, this was kind of inspired by the song Into The Ocean by Blue October. One of my favorite songs :heart:
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checkyeschloe's avatar
Amazing and so different from your other poems :) I love the last stanza the most it really wraps everything up nicely :heart: good job and glad to see that you are back my friend!! ;)